DRAFT:

This picture is gloomy. It’s very grey. The sky is grey, there is grey fog, the cement is grey, the light poles are grey. It is obvious that the picture was taken in a parking lot because I can see the white lines on the floor to mark the separation for the cars. I noticed that there is no cars. The only source of light I see is from lamp posts. Some of the lamp posts do not work. In this picture, the center of attention is a shopping cart. This probably means the picture was taken in a super market parking lot. It looks very lonely, probably because of the fog and empty space in the photo graph. It makes me wonder what has happened, or what has caused the super market to be so empty. It reminds me of this time. Because of the recent events caused by the corona virus, this picture maybe has been taken recently. The corona virus has isolated people in their homes and trapped us in it. The picture could be recent. The parking lot is empty and lifeless, there are no people around, I don’t even see trees. Although this picture was clearly taken in the day light, it feels like night time. Everything that man has done to the earth, putting cement on the ground, putting light fixtures in place, building supermarkets, etc. is still. Everything is still and somewhat at peace. It’s kind of sad to think that maybe us being entrapped inside our houses is giving the earth a break. No humans are around to litter or pollute the air with their cars. Everyone is stuck inside. Im getting off topic. In this picture there are a few prominent lights, but no vivid colors. All in all this is a lonely looking parking lot. No cars, no people, I don’t even see the supermarket in the distance because of the fog. At least it’s fog and not pollution. 

 REVISION:

This picture is gloomy. It’s very grey. The sky is grey, there is grey fog, the cement is grey, the light poles are grey. It is obvious that the picture was taken in a parking lot because of the white lines on the floor, marking the separation for cars. I noticed that there is no cars, so the picture looks lonely. The only source of light I see is from lamp posts. Some of the lights from the lamp posts have burst and don’t work. In this picture, what catches the eye is the lone shopping cart. This probably means the picture was taken in a super market parking lot. This picture gives off the feeling of being isolated, due to the fog and empty space in the photo graph. It makes me wonder what has happened, or what has caused the super market to be so empty. It reminds me of the COVID19 epidemic. The corona virus has isolated people in their homes. This image however was taken in the Tanger outlets in Louisiana in 2010 from photographer Richard Misrach.The parking lot is empty and lifeless, there are no people around or nature in the surrounding area. Overall, there are a few LED light fixtures, but no vivid colors. All in all this is a lonely looking parking lot. No cars, no people, or even the supermarket is seen in the distance. 

DISCUSSION:

For me the draft was more writing my thoughts down, I was typing every thought that popped into my head. I related it to what’s currently going on with the corona virus. When I went to revise it I read it and noticed how dramatic I sounded. To make the paragraph better I changed a couple sentences and deleted sentences that I thought were unnecessary to my point of the argument. I noticed that my draft was side tracked from the assignment question– which was to describe the photograph. It wasn’t difficult to find sentences to take out because a few were obviously unnecessary, but editing my sentences to flow better took some work. I also added the true setting of the photograph which was the Tanger Outlets.

“Feel Free,” by Zadie Smith speaks about climate change in a emotional manner. She tries to persuade the reader to see things in a “worst case scenario” sense.  She attempts to speak to the reader’s emotions multiple times by bringing up what she calls “painful reminders” she brings up nostalgic pieces like Pancake day, April showers, snow fights etc. She writes a statement for her future granddaughter explaining how mankind dropped the ball with climate change. She also ads a personal story. I personally did not find it an effective way of writing, mostly because i could not relate to it.

I think through all this she is stating that WE have the power to do something now. She explains that people in high economic stature don’t care about the future, only the now. She give an example of someone ignorantly addressing climate change: “I understand very well what is coming, but i am not concerned with my grandchildren, I am concerned with myself, my shareholders, and the Chinese competition.” Unfortunately, a lot of  the people who say this have the financial means to make a difference. Attitudes like this and the failure to spread awareness is what makes change so difficult