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2.4 Reflection

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  • What are you proud of in this draft? What’s working well?

I hope somehow i created something engaging. Hopefully the claims, evidence and thesis make sense. I think that my analysis of the object and its connection with Daggett’s essay was successful.

  • More broadly, what do you think your strengths as a writer are? Why?

With some combination of pure luck and intuition my sentences look “polished”. I’m also successful with analyzing facts, and texts.

  • What are the most important issues to address in revising Essay 2? Why?

Eliminating the “lard overload”. Rearranging the paragraphs. Shortening the sentences. Focusing more on lens analysis instead of rhetorical analysis. Getting rid of parts which sound “weird”.

It’s going to make a revision more solid and “to the point”.

  • What are your goals for revising? (Share your 2 “radical revision” steps you’ll take, too.)

The goals are:

Clear paragraphs, tightly connecting claims to the evidence.

Radical revision number 2 and 9.

essay 2 draft reflection

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  • What are you proud of in this draft? What’s working well?
  • More broadly, what do you think your strengths as a writer are? Why?
  • What are the most important issues to address in revising Essay 2? Why?
  • What are your goals for revising? (Share your 2 “radical revision” steps you’ll take, too.)

In this draft I’m proud of writing about a topic that really interests me. The picture I referred to was very upsetting to see but a good write. The relatability of the picture is working well. My strengths as a writer is that I enjoy writing from within and in this class I can write from within. In my revision the most important issues to address are more details of how the picture relates to the writing. My goals for revising is to use more details from the photograph. Two of my radical revisions are to examine the photograph in more details and to use more details from the writing.

2.4: Reflection for Revision

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I am very proud of the fact that I managed to stay on course in terms of the goals of the assignment, sometimes after writing a paper I realized that I did not accomplish the intention of the paper. I feel one of my strengths is being concise and getting straight to the point, because when I was trying to reduce the wordiness of my essay I felt that a good majority was very clear and concise. I feel that I need to expand on my analysis of my evidence throughout my essay, this was made very clear to me once I reread my essay a few days later. Two radical revision techniques I intend to use are going to a place where I need to say more and expanding, revision number one, and revision number six, writing a summary and incorporating that into my essay. Although I do have a summary already I feel that I can expand on it.

2:4 Essay 2 Reflection

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  • What are you proud of in this draft? What’s working well?

I’m most proud in how I put down a lot of thoughts that worked to my thesis.   I’m also proud that my creative writing skills seem to be still coming through

  • More broadly, what do you think your strengths as a writer are? Why?

I think I have a good command of the English language, verb usage and I write expressively.

  • What are the most important issues to address in revising Essay 2? Why?

To lengthen my thoughts and make more connections that address the “So What”

  • What are your goals for revising? (Share your 2 “radical revision” steps you’ll take, too.)

I’d like to question and deepen the flip side of the thesis for a brief moment.  I’d also like to show more real connections between the essay and media I choose.

Jazmine 2.4

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  • What are you proud of in this draft? What’s working well?

I am proud of the fact that I was actually able to formulate a clear and precise claim, that is not confusing and states exactly what I want to say.

  • More broadly, what do you think your strengths as a writer are? Why?

I think my strengths would be describing things because its the one place that you can be wordy without being too wordy. There is always room for more details when explaining something visual.

  • What are the most important issues to address in revising Essay 2? Why?

To maintain the focus of my claim throughout my essay while supporting it with details.

  • What are your goals for revising? (Share your 2 “radical revision” steps you’ll take, too.)

To complete a strong, clear and precise lens analysis without adding too much information or losing my focus.

Post 2.4:

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I managed to use the author’s take on misogyny to conduct a lens analysis of an advertisement for a king kong movie. That worked well and will be looking forward to receiving feedback that may be helpful in drafting the final paper. My strengths as a writer include the ability to construct sentences with ease. This is because  I’m never out of words and no matter how difficult the task may be, I always find a way to write the required information. The most important issue to draft in the essay might be the use of more specific information from the texts to analyze the advert. This is because I feel I didn’t use lots of specific information from the given texts. My goals for revising are to produce a perfect paper that meets all the requirements for the lens analysis and also take into consideration the peer/instructor’s comments regarding my work.