• What are you proud of in this draft? What’s working well?

I am proud of the fact that I was actually able to formulate a clear and precise claim, that is not confusing and states exactly what I want to say.

• More broadly, what do you think your strengths as a writer are? Why?

I think my strengths would be describing things because its the one place that you can be wordy without being too wordy. There is always room for more details when explaining something visual.

• What are the most important issues to address in revising Essay 2? Why?

To maintain the focus of my claim throughout my essay while supporting it with details.

• What are your goals for revising? (Share your 2 “radical revision” steps you’ll take, too.)

To complete a strong, clear and precise lens analysis without adding too much information or losing my focus.

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