DDR2:Morning Dew or Petro Smog: This post I read at 11 o’clock on March23, just checking to see what was due for the week with English.
Draft:
My interpretation of the photo was that it was possibly early morning hours in a season where the sun doesn’t come up until late. Around some mountainous area, where we can view the fog running down the mountains from afar watching through a window. The house window located on some other geographical side of a populated village. Saying I never saw fog down a mountain. Ah guess not, I am instead in a parking lot and someone left the grocery cart way out. Guess they didn’t feel like pushing it all the way back to the store. Read a few lines down and they mention it was petrochemical related so there is possibly an industry around. It could be photochemical smog. Awh! This changes my look on this parking lot, it’s not natural dew its being smogged and smothered, sucks that this is the equivalence of the carbon monoxide can put out. Climate change has been on the LP for the longest while and we still need to fix so many things apart from the climate. Another opinion. I am supposed to be descriptive about this picture. This picture two looks like the shopping complex had to be large, I view the sport type flood lights in far distances and so many of them. Even if there are no shopping places for the shopping cart around, and let’s say this parking lot was maybe somewhere near a stadium. It hard to say I see no surrounding details. It is hard to tell since the smog smothers all the detail. For certain we know it is a parking lot because it has the line markings that are descriptive of a parking lot.
Revision:
This picture two looks like the shopping complex had to be large, I view the sport type flood lights in far distances and so many of them. Even if there are no shopping places for the shopping cart around and lets say this parking lot was maybe somewhere near a stadium. It hard to say I see no surrounding details. It is hard to tell since the smog smothers all the detail. Certainly, we know it is a parking lot because it has the line markings that are descriptive of a parking lot.
Reflection:
I know I did not watch the video for this yet but will do so after. On reflection I still have a undecided view that this shopping cart could have very well been placed in a stadium, I do not see many parking lots with those types of flood lights. Just my opinion. I do note that I changed my view of thinking it was in the morning, dew hours to may be a tie in the afternoon where the photochemical smog could be thick at that hour. My first interpretation was that it was early in the morn and misty conditions prevailing. Good time for the weatherman to say put on those fog lights and drive safely. The description of DDR was the view a got from glancing on the other posts. Nicely done.




Great work, Kishan. You have a really compelling mode of thinking and writing. It’s full of curiosity, lyricism, and strangeness—and I mean that as a high compliment. The only thing I’d say is that the revision, while definitely more concise (which is good!), loses some of the interesting thinking around the petrochemical smog you included in the draft. For Essay 2, as you describe your cultural object of choice, see if you can keep this “thinking on the page / out loud” while also focusing on clarity and structure. If you do so, I think you’ll produce a pretty stunning piece of descriptive analysis. Good work!